Hello readers, today I will be telling you about my recount called The Present. It is made in paragraphs, I used full stops and capital letters. I made one of these last year with my old teacher. This year my teacher said I can copy and paste it but I had to add paragraphs and turn it into first person by changing the he's and his into I's and my's. Here is my recount I hope you enjoy it.
Pewpewpew. It was a dark afternoon, I was playing video games in a dark gloomy room. Then my mum came with a big mysterious box and said, ”Sorry, I'm late sweetie. I had to pick up something after work. You should let some light inside. It is a beautiful day outside.” Then the telephone rang. Before my mum answered the phone she said, ”Why don't you open up the present that I got you?”
Then I said, “For me.?”
Then I opened the present. I was so excited until I saw that the puppy had only three legs. Then I threw the puppy on the floor. Then I said, ”She's gotta be kidding me.” Then I pushed the box on the floor. Then I got so mad that I went back to playing my video games.
Then the dog saw a red shiny glossy ball under the white shiny cupboard. When the puppy got to the White cupboard he hit his head on the cupboard door. Then he saked his head, puts his head under the cupboard and grabs the ball with his mouth. Then I saw the dog playing with the ball, he started rolling around. When he came up to me, I just said, “Go away.” The dog loves the red ball, he likes to play with it. I think the ball looks like a clown's nose. I like the dog but I do not want the dog to know. So when I look at the dog he smiles and when the dog looks at me I grin then go back to playing my video games.
Then the ball rolled to me and then I said, “Come on let's go play outside. Mum we are going to play outside! Come on let's go.”
THE END
I hope you made it through my long writing. :)
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